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I like "Lone Me Tweenty, I'm Winning.2", but it's Jazz, not Americana.
thanks for the 5 star on what most have never had
Congratulations on your song being selected as the winner of the Broadjam Hot 100 Song Competition! What song was it? They don't say.
Thanks, Bob! It was "She's Meant To Be".
Do you do your own production?
So I send my songs to a demo studio in Nashville. I do melody and lyrics and Guitar for an worktape. About 1/2 the time the final product had my musical production done with better musicians than myself. She's Meant to Be is very close to my original production but boosted to 11 thanks to excellent Nashville session players. How about you?
I use a Nashville outfit, too, A Writer's Paradise Studios. They do a fantastic job, as you can hear. What's the name of who you use? I can't play the piano or guitar anymore due to disease.
PearlSnap Studios. I've been really impressed with them. Good quality and price.
And sorry to hear about the disease thing. I have some spinal issues and a trigger thumb myself. Had to learn how to hold a pick all over. Tough time sitting too long from messed up discs but I'm making it work as best I can. Wish you well my friend.
My disks are fine, but my vertebrae are dissolving. ðŸ'„
I love ALL your songs....... the vocalists you have are very good.... they represent the songs well...... do you do the composing?
Yes, I wrote the lyrics and now choose the chords. I'ma poet convinced to become a songwriter. I took a refresher course in Music Composition 101. You can find my lyric videos on YouTube. I keep adding more every day.
Analysis of "Because You're Beautiful"
1. Theme & Emotion
The primary theme of this song revolves around admiration, love, and deep attraction towards someone perceived as beautiful. The lyrics exude an emotional and intense affection bordering on obsession. The artist repeatedly mentions the beauty of this person as the primary reason for their feelings.
The word "beautiful" is the cornerstone of this song, serving as a refrain and used repeatedly to underscore the intensity of the singer's feelings. This repetition gives the song a hypnotic quality and emphasizes its theme of beauty and allure.
3. Lyric Structure
- Verses: These primarily detail the singer's attraction and the reasons behind those feelings, focusing on physical attraction and beauty.
- Bridge: Offers a divergence from the central theme by introducing the idea of wishes and dreams. The "blue" sky is a metaphor for happiness and a perfect world. This part adds depth to the singer's feelings, suggesting that they desire more than just physical beauty - they crave the emotional happiness of being with the admired person.
4. Word Choice
The descriptors used throughout the song, like "stunning", "lovely", "gorgeous", "striking", "radiant", and "flawless," further cement the idea of physical beauty. Words like "lust", "must have", "admire", and "desire" introduce a passionate, almost urgent nature to the singer's emotions.
5. Metaphorical Elements
The bridge's mention of "3 wishes plus two" implies that even if the singer had more than the traditional three wishes, they would all be used to be with the admired person. The idea of the sky being perpetually blue ties into the dreamlike, idealized world the singer envisions with their loved one.
6. Potential Areas of Concern
While the song celebrates beauty, it might be perceived as emphasizing physical beauty too much, potentially overshadowing other aspects of a relationship or the individual's non-physical attributes. This heavy emphasis on looks might be seen as superficial by some listeners.
7. Overall Impression
"Because You're Beautiful" is a passionate ode to physical beauty and the emotions it evokes. The song delves deep into the world of intense admiration and attraction, using vibrant language and repetition to convey its message. While the emphasis on physical beauty is strong, the bridge hints at the deeper emotional connection the singer desires.
WOW! Bob,your song reviews are pretty intense, in a good way, honestly i didn't put any where near that much thought into writing them lol, just trying to find the next rhyme. what made you want to review not one but 3 of my tunes. are you a producer/licensing guy etc.,i'm always looking for new avenues to pitch my stuff,if you have any good connections in the biz i offer a 50/50 split. you get an income producing deal you get 50% of it. anyway thanks for taking the time in doing these song reviews very informative, i didn't know i was that clever. LOL. on this song think joe cockers 'you are so beautiful".next review the music as well just a thought, i'd love to hear your take on my melodies, song structure, chord progessions etc, your awesome thanks again,ljw
You're welcome! I'm a poet convinced to become a songwriter. I have to pay to have my lyrics produced. I can't break down your music as I do your lyrics, sorry.
ok got it, again amazing job on the reviews,thanks again,
Song Analysis: "I Wanna Be You"
Theme & Message:
The song's central theme revolves around admiration and the desire to emulate someone the singer holds in high esteem. The subject's identity isn't specified, which allows listeners to interpret and relate to the song in a personalized manner. It could be about wanting to be like a friend, a mentor, a celebrity, a lover, or even a version of oneself.
1. Contrasts: By juxtaposing desires like wanting to "dance like Fred Astaire" or "live a life with all that fame" with the singular wish of wanting to be like the song's subject, it accentuates the depth of the singer's admiration.
2. Repetition: Phrases like "I wanna be you," and variations of it ("I'd rather be you," "I admire you") emphasize the song's central message.
3. Cultural References: The song mentions famous figures like Fred Astaire, Superman, and Elvis and the roles of a president and a CEO. These references illustrate the wide range of people's desires and highlight the uniqueness of the singer's wishes.
"I Wanna Be You" uses familiar structural elements and a universally relatable theme of admiration. Its strength lies in its simplicity and repetitive nature, making it easy for listeners to catch onto and sing along. The cultural references also give it a touch of familiarity, while the repeated emphasis on the desire to be someone else gives the song an emotional weight. With the proper musical treatment, it could be a memorable anthem of devotion and admiration.
Analysis of "It's a Beautiful Thing"
At its core, the song celebrates the beauty of life, nature, and human experiences. Here's a deeper analysis:
1. Joy in Everyday Moments: From watching children play to picnics by the lake, the song emphasizes the beauty in seemingly mundane moments of life. It encourages listeners to find joy in simple things, a philosophy rooted in mindfulness and being present.
2. Nature: The song continually references natural phenomena, such as sunny skies, breezes, bluebirds, and rainbows. This theme underscores the notion that nature is a continuous source of joy and beauty.
3. Human Experiences: Elements like the "sweet smile in your eyes" or "a child's look of surprise" emphasize the human aspect of life's beauty. These moments are relatable, making listeners think about their experiences and memories.
Structure & Songwriting:
1. Verses: Each verse provides snapshots of beautiful moments, both big and small. The verses are detailed and imagery-driven, creating vivid mental pictures that evoke emotions.
2. Bridge: The bridge of a song typically provides a different melody or perspective, and in this song, it acts as a call to action. It encourages living life to the fullest and cherishing every moment, regardless of age.
3. Repetitions: The phrase "it's a beautiful thing" is a repetitive anchor throughout the song. This repetition emphasizes the song's central message and is a memorable refrain.
Areas of Improvement:
1. Grammar & Spelling: There are some spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., "freash" instead of "fresh", "eeze" instead of "ease"). Fixing these would polish the song and enhance its readability.
2. Cohesiveness: While the song captures many beautiful moments, it could benefit from a more cohesive narrative thread. It reads as a collection of beautiful moments rather than a journey or story.
3. Emotional Depth: The song is joyful and uplifting. However, integrating contrasting emotions or more profound insights into why these moments are beautiful might give them more depth and make them more relatable.
Overall, the song captures a positive and uplifting message about finding beauty in everyday life. With some tweaks and refinement, it has the potential to resonate deeply with listeners.
Welcome to the Top Ten Country!
Congrats on "If You Only Knew" getting selected!!!!!
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. They're another music library. They charge $50 for submitting tracks to them; at least I don't have to pay that as I'm "selected". They want a five-year contract entitling them to 50% of licensing fees. I'm going to pass, as it seems that most of their placements have been for instrumental tracks; they're also heavily oriented to rap, hip-hop, etc.Â I think "If You Only Knew" has far better potential than sitting in a dusty music library. I'm going to ask my agent to submit to Chris Stapleton!
Hey Bob- Thanks again for the 5 star ratings! Appreciate it!
Really good song, Past Loves! Any chance that Mike Lusk singing?
Yep, that's Mike Lusk. Since I'm a poet convinced to turn some of my poems into songs but can't play anything anymore due to the condition of my hands, I have to pay to have them produced. Deb Thomas does the ones I write for a female singer. I will soon have a couple of male/female duets made with both of them singing.
Wow Bob! You apparently don't need those hands for some awfully good songwriting!
Thanks! I'm a pretty good six-finger typeist.
I just got "Reclaim Your Light" sent to me, but it needs a remix; the vocal is too low. My agent thinks it's perfect for Carrie Underwood; I hope she does.
Do you do your productions? Do you have a home studio?
"Reclaim Your Light" is up: https://broadjam.com/songs/Bob_Juch
Yes- I have a half baked home studio... My handicap is my vision and hearing aids... If I get something I think is worth it, I'll usually hire a studio person to do a better mix...
I see a couple more 5 stars you did! Can't thank you enough man!
I have hearing aids, too, now. I went to too many rock concerts.
Hah! I had too many loud drummers in my bands over the years! lol
You are writing some pretty good stuff Bob!
Thank you, sir! My agent just sent Rodney Atkins "Past Loves, Present Heart".ðŸ¤ž
I wrote an answer to "Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?" It's here: https://www.broadjam.com/songs/Bob_
Thank you for the five stars on "Last Second Chance"! That was the first song I turned from a poem into a song. I hope I've gotten better since then.
Grabbed that track somewhat randomly as I recall. Very nice, strong number. The lady singing certainly does it justice. I will surely audit more of your material in the near future.
Hey, maybe we can be friends? I'll leave that up to you. :)
All the best to you sir!
Your tribute and timing is right on, literally and figuratively! I could have sworn I heard this on Tiki Man Radio? If not, you should send it to them. They have a great crew and will love it! It's Tikimandradio.com Coastal Americana.
Thank you, I asked them how to do that.
There is a link on their site "Submit Music"!
Oops, I didn't see that. I received a reply asking me to send them a link via email.
Hey Bob, Just wanted to let you know I appreciate the 5 Star rating for My Mama's Way...
I only had enough time to listen to all your songs, but loved Queen of the Broken Hearts so far...
Keep up the great writing and thanks again...
I see you liked a couple of Ed Bentley's songs too. He's a great guy and write amazing stuff!!!
Best to you,
Yes, you both are.
Hey Bob, Want to thank you for the 2 five star ratings on my songs! Really appreciate it so much!
Best to you,
You're very welcome! I'll be listening to your other songs soon.
I've been listening to your tunes and am finishing up today. You've got a large bunch of five-star songs!
Thanks my friend!
Thanks for listening to my song, Memories That Last Forever, and the 5 star rating. I've listened to several of your songs and like what I hear. Wishing you the best! Tommy
You're welcome! I'll listen to more of yours later today.
Bob, thanx for rating a couple of my songs, it is appreciated. You have some very impressive music on your page, well done.
A New Hamshireite member of the Conch Republic who likes tamales made with Hatch green chilies! I think you'll love my song, "I Miss Jimmy".
I tried searching your artist name and "I Miss Jimmy" to listen and review, but search said no results! Will you send me/attach your song?
All you have to do is click on my name, but here's the link: https://www.broadjam.com/Bob_Juch
I. Love. It!
This song celebrates music, resilience, and the artist's journey. It touches upon the highs and lows artists face in their careers, their solace in music, and the universal language that music offers. The song encourages everyone to embrace the moment, be fearless, and find joy and connection in music.
Bob, Glad you are enjoying our song!! It was written for a Fellow Broad Jam member, that was quite famous in his youth!! But has had some health issues causing some difficulties in his Playing as he is aging!! He is still an incredible Musician!!
Art & Margie Corey.............
I love "The Story of My Life"! I wrote a song with the same title but entirely different. I wrote a concept album about a woman's life, and that's the penultimate song. I'm slowly having the songs recorded; the first ones are uploaded here.
I just uploaded this: https://broadjam.com/songs/Bob_Juch
/youre-gonna-miss-me. I think it's one of my best.
My agent submitted "If You Only Knew" and "The Queen of Broken Hearts" for consideration to George Strait and Matthew Ewing. "I Miss Jimmy" is being submitted for consideration to Kenny Chesney and Luke Bryan.
Bob, may I ask who your Agent is, I will not approach them....promise!! Just curious who it is?? Is a connection thru Broad Jam??
Hey I'm interested too. Who is your agent? And I definitely will approach them!
My agent is Mark Fuhrer. He's a member here. He approached me after seeing my songs in the Top Ten lists. Go ahead and contact him. There's room for all of us. So that you know, he charges upfront instead of taking a percentage.
P.S. I have submitted my entire catalog so far to Spotify, Amazon, YouTube, Facebook, Instagram, and many more. I can give you a referral code to an outfit that does that if you want.
I just added a new song, "You're going to miss me" which I feel is one of my best.
My agent submitted "If You Only Knew" and "The Queen of Broken Hearts" for consideration to George Strait and Matthew Ewing. "I Miss Jimmy" is being submitted for consideration to Kenny Chesney and Luke Bryan.
I have uploaded "I Miss Jimmy". I hope you love it.
Bob, Great Tune Sir! Love the melody and great production of the music!! One of your Best!!! Sorry about my own personal thought regarding your marvelous composition!! 5 Stars all the way!!
Well now Bob,
Thank you for reviewing True Friend even if it was an incredibly negative affair, in all respects. I'm not sure you quite understand that the point of a review is to try and assist your fellow songwriters in producing the best they can? Personally, I don't really mind whether you like the song or not, I'm long enough in the tooth not to be bothered by that. I also continuously ask for feedback from fellow Bjammers and expect both good and bad, otherwise I'm not making best use of the site.
However, if I were someone new to this business, I might not be encouraged to be told: "The lyrics are pretty trite" or "The theme is "It'll get better." That's not what someone who's depressed wants to hear." Firstly, what do they want to hear, that it's all going to get worse? And secondly, check out the cliches in That Was Your Last Second Chance by Bob Juch before you go wading in to other people's hard work and inspiration - I picked that at random by the way, there may be others?.
Reviews come with responsibility and consequences Bob. If you are only able to criticise without also providing support and encouragement to fellow Broadjam members, you are going to have a rough ride on here. It's not a question of saying everything is rosy when it isn't, it's question of being constructive, not destructive, whilst respecting the fact that none of us, including you, are hit song writers but can learn much from each other.
As for my British singing voice, that doesn't decide the genre of a song, that's in the writing, instrumentation, arrangement and production. I've managed to do very nicely in the Broadjam Country charts over the years, often being the only Brit amongst some damned good US songwriters.
I suggest we start again Bob.
Who the hell are you Bob? Are you a paying member or a plant, Robert?
Bob Bentley is a quality writer. Period. Listening to your work leads me to believe you aren't.
Warren (look me up, I look forward to a review!
Bob, two things come to mind. First, the reason Bob Bentley, Warren Hein, Shelly Lee, and others are great songwriters is because they write from the grit and stuff of life's experiences, things that you may not be comfortable with, things that matter, perhaps the joys you forgot about. Their songs are not surface, they have richness and meaning. The second thing is that they can write great melodies that are unique and memorable. They know how to write a hit. I heard some of your songs. The melodies carry through well but are somewhat monochromatic meanderings that would be okay as album cuts, but nothing I would consider a single. Perhaps you're jealous?
I have a problem with people giving platitudes to others who are in a bad way. "True Friend" hit my trigger. The music was great; I don't like the lyrics.
Since I can't comment on the song itself, here's my review of "I'm Taking Care of Me":
Since I can't add it to your song, here's my review of "I'm Taking Care of Me"
The song clearly conveys its message--taking care of oneself after a heartbreak. It's a powerful narrative of moving on and learning from the past.
The verses and the outro reinforce the central theme well. The bridge is a turning point in the story, indicating a shift in perspective.
The rhyme scheme is straightforward but could be more engaging. A slightly more complex rhyme scheme could add another layer of sophistication to the song.
Verse 1: The lines "That smile you hid behind / I thought I knew from other guys" could be more specific to evoke stronger emotions or images.
For example: "That crooked smile you always wore / I've seen it on some hearts I tore."
Verse 2: The line "I cried but those tears washed me clean" is strong but could be more poetic.
For example: "I cried, but tears became my stream."
Bridge: The imagery in the bridge is good but could be improved by being more vivid.
For example: "What a joke, you leaned for a kiss / I dodged away, you swung and missed."
Verse 3: The line "But no expensive sessions" could clarify what "sessions" means, such as therapy sessions or something else.
For example: "But no pricey therapy."
The song could benefit from a compelling instrumental or melodic bridge to accompany the lyrical bridge. This could serve as a musical metaphor for the transformation the singer is undergoing.
Use dynamic variations to emphasize emotional points. For example, a softer instrumental section during the bridge could heighten the drama.
Varying the vocal delivery between verses could add interest. Maybe the first verse is soft and reflective, the second is angrier, and the third is confident and optimistic.
The outro repetition of "I'm taking care of me" is empowering but could become even more impactful with a background chorus or vocal harmony to underline the sentiment.
John Walradt, if you read my bio, you will see I'm a poet turned songwriter. The lyrics are the most important thing to me. I tell stories.
I was a decent musician, but my hands are too crippled now. I tell the musicians what chords I want and give them performance notes, but the rest is up to them. Some of the songs I uploaded are the first ones I created. Three of the subsequent ones are currently in multiple Top Ten lists here. There's no jealousy going on.
You say, "They write from the grit and stuff of life's experiences, things that you may not be comfortable with, things that matter." If you listened to my songs, you would have seen that's exactly what I do, even though I use a female singer.
I've been writing poetry literally since 4th grade. My songs are a total picture, similar to each of our lives. Your lyrical suggestions are frankly awkward and do nothing to improve the song, which again is a painting of an entire story. One either likes the "pictures" painted or not. But like a well crafted song or "painting", one can't rewrite or paint over a well crafted work.
But I appreciate you listening, I have many more. I'm anxious to hear your thoughts.
I invest in fine art that I wouldn't ever hang on the walls of my house.
De gustibus non est disputandum.
Well that's all sorted then.
You haven't read my comment Bob. I don't expect platitudes and I don't really care whether you like my song, or not. What I do care about is people who are seemingly unable to be encouraging and constructive.
BTW, if you liked the music you might just have found something more positive to say than "The mix is good"?
I'm grateful to my friends for rallying around but I fear we're all wasting our time.
Being a melody person, not a poet but a storyteller, I'd have to say that words and music work together to create and express the emotional content of a song that gives it a deeper human meaning. Aside from all else, I'm honestly sorry of the condition of your hands. I wish that age didn't come with maladies and deteriorations. But the creative spirit in us won't be stopped! I do agree with Bob Bentley on what we are here for at Broadjam. With that I'll stop here. Best to you.
I just uploaded three new songs. Please check them out.
Gee...why don't you just say how you really feel. If you didn't like Country in Chicago..no big deal, but you were down right mean and unprofessional.
Hope it made you feel good.
Nothing about it is Country.
Hard to find the right genre sometimes for a song on here. Will think on it. Thanks for your input.